1st Rough cut+evaluation

After filming the first scenes, I produced a rough draft on Premier

Here are some of the comments from my peers and teacher:

What went well:

-CINEMATOGRAPHY

-180 degree line

-Reaction shots 

-The scene where the detective clicks his fingers and the lights turn on

-Character costumes

-Film Settings 

What could be improved: 

-The Printing scene at the beginning was abit too long, the time could be used on more significant things.

-The Audio (there are very loud air conditioner noises as well as other people speaking.)

-Lack of Music: Some music could be added

-the Dialogue could be removed to create a sense of curiosity for the audience

-Colour Correcting

-The film's pace: people suggested that the pace could change from slow to fast in order to create more tension.

- Characters: I played "Dennis Lee", a 19 year old man but my appearance didn't live up to that role. 

The scenes with  the police report will be re filmed and Mr. Harrison suggested having a female murderer for more diverse representation.
-Handcuff Scene: Further emphasis could be added by using a trackshot and making the sound of the handcuffs echo.